All Comments on 'That Buddy from College Pt. 01'

just flirting...get to the good stuff

Far too short, would have left more impact if the story was a bit longer.

So, you've got me curious, what is that thing they used to do. Nice slow buildup and can't wait to find out more. Looking forward to part 2, soon, I hope. Thanks.

This chapter was too short and too vague. It is unclear what is even going on and then it ends prematurely. Too soon for a cliffhanger - we aren’t even invested in the story or characters and it’s already over. Need to give more at the beginning to make us care enough to continue.

Lots of potential here for these characters. Taking the story further along and correcting the spelling would make it hotter still!