by wistan
The dialogue was written that way intentionally; the character in question speaks English as a second language.
Your story was great but your grammar was a bit confusing to understand like the direct speeches had missing words, get a good editor who can fix these errors but it was definitely a great story. I am looking forward to more of your stories <3
Thank you for the comment and I'm very glad you liked the story!
Maybe worth noting that the other stories I've posted here are mostly old, anything up to a decade old, whereas this one is brand new. So I'm glad to hear I've gotten a bit better at writing.
I'm not sure where a future part could take this, really. The story I had in mind was about the seduction, and a skeptic facing the possibility that he was dealing with magic (or was he!)... I don't have any clear thoughts on what would happen next in their story. If something occurs, I will definitely think about a chapter 2.
Great story! Exciting, erotic, fresh and fun. As much as I enjoyed your other stories, this one is the best. Her control and his addiction... so exciting.
Please consider expanding this one and adding a chapter. I would really like to see how she molds him completely into exactly the bitch boy that she wants.
Thank you for writing and posting here.