All Comments on 'The Afternoon Dinner'

This was impossible to read.

That was horribly written. Sorry but I couldn't make sense of the sentences. Go over this about a dozen times and clean it up. Read it out loud.

Translation has lost much of the deeper meanings in your writing. English doesn't work for you at all!!

Just awful writing. The concept was bad too.

WTF was that???? You have 7 stories and 8 followers. Time to take the hint and find a new hobby!

Ditto editors looking for a challenge fix this one! Might be a diamond in the rough.

Obviously, English is not your primary language, at least as far as a written language.

I gave up reading this a few paragraphs in because it just made no sense. You need an editor who can take your idea and wring it out of your inability to express it in English. Failing that, write and publish it on a website that is in your primary language.