by rmcgee
Keep the story coming, it's great so far
revile - criticise in an abusive or angrily insulting manner; hatefully; to despise
reveal - to expose; to show; to open to view
Not attacking, just that a spellchecker isn't everything, when a word used is almost the opposite of what should have been used, it causes the reader to pause, to work it out, only a couple of seconds, but the delay, breaks the flow
He needs to fuck all the aunts.. and his mom.... and they need to find out about each other
How many times can you use the word fat? You need an editor really badly.