All Comments on 'The Babysitters'

5 Stars. Please keep going.

Dayummm that was amazing, I want this 😍

Great read but gotta do better with perspective.

Pretty good, I like it!

I wonder how many people here have actually had incest or they just fantasize about it. Deep dark secrets...maybe that's why my wife and I were destined to be. We both had incestuous experiences in our teenage years. And still do now in our fifties.

No incest, unless you're building up to daddy dicking her down when she gets home. If not, wrong category.

TimTam

The switching between third and first person in this is really kind of unpleasant and jarring.

Definitely need more chapter's with Mr. Benedict, aka Daddy.

Good take on the babysitter theme, but the switching of tenses is really annoying, and the change of person an unnecessary annoyance. Try reading it aloud.

Have someone edit your story to check for tense and correct word use. Also, wrong category unless Mr. Benedict is your father, brother, cousin, etc.