All Comments on 'The Barbecue'

Five *****. Very good story. You my dear, are going to be challenged to keep going. You will need longer stories, more complex (and titillating plot) , but I suspect you can, and will, do it! I hope so and look forward to reading more.

I wish that I could give it a 10.

Wow! Love all the four stories. You need an editor though 😋

Minor edit - I think you meant "continued kissing" rather than "kidding*.

Apart from that, not a bad story. Definitely interested in the other chapters.

All four were nice and hot. As was already stated, you could really benefit from working with an editor to help polish these up before submission. Can't wait to see more!

Good job describing Jane's orgasm while on top. The gradual escalation, as if in real time.

very well written

"Are you okay with me dating both of you?" "Absolutely." And just like that, another beta writer gets ignored.

I think she should have given her virginity to Olivia