All Comments on 'The Bartender'

The story is fine but the language looks like you merged two stories. You have all three getting it going but constantly instead of using her name or other close term you kept saying your.. your legs your mouth.. your..... it took away from the story about.

Just a note: I have nothing against Birmingham! I just picked a random place in England. So I'm sorry if I offended you :)

terrific -- can't wait for the next installment

Sorry about the language mistakes in this story ("you" instead of "her" on several places). I original wrote Emma as "you" and I rushed through the final edit, so that's where I made a few mistakes. Wish I could edit or correct the story, but I guess I can't so it is what it is :)