All Comments on 'The Black Queen Pt. 01: The Lottery'

Wow, was hooked from the beginning. Reading the rest of your work, now 11☆s of course!

That's a real good beginning. Stefan is an easy guy to root for, his relationships to both Elizabeth and Maggie ask for more investigation, and his fate as the Queen's chosen is full of questions and intrigue. Looking forward to a lenghty and exciting adventure. :D

Very immersing and well written. I'll be checking out some more stories.

Exceptional, loved the village setting (although far too clean), Scene with Maggie was as hot and sweet as apple pie fresh from the stove. An excellent start, now write more!!

On the other hand, what Princess, what far away evil castle??

That is not an abrupt chapter break, it is just a mess. An A to start and then a C- .

The boy boarding the coach is cliff hanger enough.

Now write more !!

Please and thank you. 🤠