by ChristianP
If this is The Boy Who controlled his mom, why isn't he in control?
He's in the TWILIGHT ZONE...........................
I wish you had taken this alot slower. I share your fetish and am ecstatic to see someone writing this kind of material, however, you have taken the story too fast and have deviated from the initial plot. I would recommend doing a rewrite, which shouldn't take too long. Have the son revel in his new-found control, and have the story focus around him (after all, it is The Boy Who Controlled His Mom).
While I love the idea, this story would be twice as good if you could slow down and focus on the details. Like I said, focus on the takeover. Focus on the power the son now has (or seems like he has) over his new alien army. This is a hot idea, but it's moving too fast for me to soak in some of the more erotic parts.
This is a sci/fi story that is really starting to get scary.
It's a lot like body snatchers with a lot of fucking.
I'll be looking for the next chapter.