by Luccstar025
Hey this is Luccstarr025, sorry there was not much action in part 1. Things should get more heated in the next installment.
No apologies necessary Luccstar.
I loved the way you laid the ground work for Jenna and Rosa's background and who they are, their different personalities. It makes the story so much more interesting than a quick descent into MC. You are making this a real story with three dimensional characters. I love stories like this. Keep up the great work.
First error comes in the second sentence: "1# detective". It doesn't really get any better afterwards, either.
I shall continue on to the next installment, but the grammar is a distraction.