All Comments on 'The Bush Pub'

Hot. It is always good when spouses can get off on something like this

excellent chapter

Continue on

Cheers!

Terrific premise.

Clever plot line.

Could have used more in the way of serious involvement with her breasts. She could have asked him to show her how he liked them. Show her what he wanted to do to/with them.

Could have used more of her teasing his cock. And his balls. Before taking it in her mouth.

Nothing with her ass? Not even while he was eating her pussy? No touching her asshole? If she liked it, his tongue could have 'slipped' and licked it.

Easily could have been five stars, but just didn't get there.

Four stars.

Not too bad. The African jargon was confusing so I recommend toning it down.

I liked the heat, I liked the wantonness, I liked the hot bodies and the South African backdrop

Excellent! Looking forward to the next chapter. Believable characters, credible storyline, hot girl, hot action.

A good start to the story. Will the story end with just the two men having her around the pool ? Guess we will have to wait and see.

Too rushed for me and lacking in vivid details.

Hot story, well written. I would like a bit more character understanding, backstory, dialogue or emotion. 4*

Now, if she'll just fuck all the other guys there!

Great story. Nice pace, not short and rushed, not long and drawn out. Great work!

Very hot story,