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by NotHemingway

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Good premise.

But the sex, when it happens, happens much too fast. Starts too abruptly. Ends too soon. Not enough details. Not enough stringing it out. Could have used more foreplay before cock inserted into pussy. Could have used some discussion of what each liked, and how they liked it. Could have used some extended teasing/edging of his cock -- perhaps to convince him he really wanted to go ahead with sex. Could have used some oral -- both ways.

Four stars.

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I write for a living, although not fiction. I enjoy stories where the eroticism flows from the narrative, and the specifics are left to one's imagination. I am often accused of being short on descriptions of sex acts, but I'm trying to do better in that regard. All comments...

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