All Comments on 'The Confessor Pt. 02'

Very good job writing it, but the story truly sucks. It was a total fantasy by some bull dyke twat that would never happen with a real man around. All of these power hungry cunts would die a slow painful death if they were dealing with a man with some balls.

his little wife is being brainwashed.

hopefully he can turn this shit around.

What a fucking joke.

Really well written. Looking forward to the next installment. Good job.

As comments said on chapter one, and you yourself has tagged, this belongs in Fantasy.

So much stupid into one story?

really does not help.

It's well written. You will get many more views and constructive criticism in loving wives. They'll score it low, however. Probably would score very high in fantasy.

Go take a Cyclon B shower

I am hoping that there is a third installment at some point.

Grateful for the feedback (those of you who actually said something worthwhile, that is).

There will be several more parts added to this story when I get to time to do it. Hope you enjoy reading it.

stupid story how did you make it go on for so long should have stopped after the first page

PLEASEdont write any more of this crap im a writer and would rather watch tv than read this get a life

Misandrist crap.

What in hell was the point of this sorry piece of shit. You must be out of your mind thinking that reading would find this story erotic. If this is you best quit now!!

Nothing to see here, folks.

Move along to the next story.

This one won't ever be finished anyway!

It’s painful for a man to read, but fascinating. Please bring on ch 3, this episodes cliffhanger is brutal.

While I felt like you could have moved the story more. I like the story overall and look forward to the next chapter

I expected the response I'm getting. The sad thing is that I value constructive feedback, but all I'm getting is anger and insults.

*sigh*

Rest assured, part 3 is in the works. Though I won't post it in LW because it won't be focused on Samuel and Delilah. However, other chapters will return to this category, and, when they do, I will weather the shitstorm once again.

And to all the angry anons. See you next chapter; we both know you won't be able to stay away. :-D

As bad as it is for the victim gender to get off on this plot, it's possibly worse that a Woman would have this fantasy. I have met a few women over the decades that were serious about this type of Regime Imperia stuff. All but one were seriously messed up people.

But I think most people who like this kind of plot are just stroke/finger story fans, who don't take the religious/political aspect seriously.

Lucille's story is a bit different because other than being 4x over wordy, she can write well. So who knows we're it will go?

Yes it probably belongs in fantasy, but so do a lot of other LW story plots. And no doubt religions of various kinds do abuse idiots, err the naive and trusting, in real life.

As one who believes in SSCC, I loathe all indulgence of scorn porn and abuse porn if it extends past the end of a fantasy session. But again in Lucille's defense, we don't know where this is going yet, and she hasn't really advocated one way or the other, just presented the abuse and injustice as fair accompli so far.

To the anony who was advocating for this story by using "pussies" as an insult:

You do know that is sexist and demeaning to women, right? Why don't you add the critics "throw like girls". DUH

I don't like the plot or the story but it's got me hooked I can't stop reading it. It's a definite five.

You write very well. I gather this takes place in a dystopian future, or parallel universe, in which militant feminists have seized power under the guise of religion. I don't find that so hard to envision. In fact, we seem to be subjected to feminist indoctrination daily. Has anyone here seen the new version of the "Charmed" TV series that is currently being produced, for example? Or numerous other TV series, and movies, in which petite women supposedly out fight and out think men, who are invariably portrayed in a negative light.

There are many directions I could see this going. Apparently, the husband is going to become a "freedom fighter", and strike back. I look forward to seeing where you take this. I found the husband's helplessness and general ineptitude to be annoying, although I can see that it has served a purpose in the story so far. Hopefully, the husband will learn and grow in the next installment; learn to fight, and get the technological strength enhancements that the confessors have. This could turn into a sort of "super hero" story, in which the enhanced husband and his fellow freedom fighters save the world from the evil feminists. I was a little surprised that you did not have one of the women forcibly rape the husband with the Spear near the end of this chapter. That might have been interesting; perhaps you will include that scene in an upcoming chapter. More information about the enhancements provided by the technology available to the confessors might be useful to the reader, including how the Spear is evidently linked to the nervous system of the wearer. That could easily be provided by information the husband learns from his new friends in the resistance movement.

Please pay no attention to the idiot "trolls" who provide negative comments. Most of them are laughable and pathetic (both the trolls and their comments). I admire you for posting this story in the Loving Wives section. That took courage.

Yes it is hard to read and it is basically a loving wives story where the wife is corrupted by another woman instead of a man ,and also it is another kind of story,the religious figure convincing the wife that being seduced is for some deity...and it is hard to read bc samual obviously lives delilah. What makes the story more interesting is how things like this have gone on,especially with reigion,where a priest or priestess convinces a spouse they have a duty. The dear old Catholic Church with its sanctity of marriage bs de facto sanctioned priests and the like taking married women as mistresses,or the local noble taking the comely young bride as his lover,often not letting have sex w the husband,and telling the distraught husband 'it is the will of God,my son' (and this was true all the way up the line,the popes were known for their many mistresses,most of them married). These days lot of the evangelical churches have had similar things,not to mention cults like the branch davidians. Or watch 'the handmaid's tale' for that matter.

So while this is more in a fantasy realm,it tells to the corruption of power (whether there really is something 'holy' w the confessor and delilah,whether this is more than the confessoe stealing the bride, that is up to the writer). The writing is well up there in terms of the writing itself,well crafted.

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Good writing, a lot of imagination, but a serious stretch to put this in LW. Only the most open-minded readers will accept it here.

a third chapter is needed as delilah finally realizes that the church is nothing but marriage wreckers in it and will do anything to destroy marriages

The last page was by far the most interesting part of the story.

What would be most intriguing is if Samuel is shown how to save himself or get revenge by the people who can help him but in the process of exacting his revenge on the church, it actually changes him, making more cold, ferocious, and obviously more tainted that the naive person he was at the beginning who thought the best of people. That would make for a solid tale.

Waste of my time

Lesbian man hating porn.

is this it? I have been checking back for the next part. Samuel to get some balls and his wife to wake up.

The writing is frustrating and often irritating but still somehow draws the reader forward. Even the sex scenes are filler rather than part of the story still I made it through part 2. Religious ferver combined with sex and probably some pretty powerful drugs makes mind control possible here. It remains to be seen wether there is any way out.

The inane direction of this "story" is beyond comprehension. I can hope the people who managed to get past page 2 were rewarded with something of substance.

Unfortunately, I'm not that patient and I have a life, so moving on... one star because I'm generous.

How can some one write eleven pages of such garbage?

I really like the story...I hope you will continue. I gave 5-stars.

I really enjoyed this story, I could imagine how Sam becomes a force of change from the outside - changing and cleansing the Church. But reconciliation with his wife would probably be impossible, although forgiveness would be possible.

where is the next part? 11 pages and still no closer to closure. No promise of a next. Sad.

This definitely needs a third chapter.

This definitely needs a third chapter.

I still don't understand the hate over this story. This takes place in a made up society. Most stories are generic copies of other stories - this story is original. Five stars. Please more chapters.