All Comments on 'The Corruption of Jade Pt. 01'

If I may give you some constructive criticism:

The plot is good, but the execution is a bit lackluster. Most of the things you tell if you could also show them.

I’m not a religious person in any way shape or form but I definitely do not mock others for their beliefs. Faith IMHO is a private matter.

John the Dom fucked up badly, he gleefully crossed that student : teacher boundary. I wanted to try these first couple of chapters because ch.4 is a hard pass. BDSM a is supposed to be all about trust, communication and the power exchange. This version, your version is something else entirely.

Exploring BDSM should be an awakening not a corruption.

Best of luck with your writing.

Tess (uk)