The Daddy Swap

Finally read the last two pages, so this is an addendum to my last comment -

The last few pages of this story felt more like they were "lifted" from any script for a thousand "Foursome" Porn Video, all the Cliche foursome loathsome antics the Porn Video industry had rerun now for the last 20 years with Two Girls and usually Two OLDER guys.

It's a shame, it's like you ran out of original ideas, abandoned any hopes of it being tiniest bit romantic between the four kinda related people, dads and their daughters, and just copied some tasteless porn film. Even Alissa turned into just another Slut as big as Chloe clearly is. I could see both of them 'Turning Tricks' in the evening streets of Melbourne.

Shame, you really fucked up what could have been a kinda romantic adventure for both the girls and dads.

Loved it! I'd enjoy reading about their lives once they're back in home territory, with some travels in Australia and, of course, Ali preparing herself and eventually rising to the challenge of inviting then welcoming Uncle Max into her rear entrance.

Great Story, "weaved" well, could be more character development of the girls in the first page, barely any physical description, didn't even know Alissa was very small breasted and a Red Head until finally a ref to her "landing strip". Also, watch out for the all too often "Run on paragraphs that should grammatically be several paragraphs. 90% of the writers on this site have the worst Grammar I've ever seen, as an Editor! One other note, Personally I think you painted Chloe far too much as a bona fide Slut in the first half dozen pages, including want to hump a local Blackie she had no history. You'd wonder, with your story line on her, how she hadn't already gotten AIDS, Herpes, Gonorrhea and Syphilis in her slutty adventures. Keep your girl characters Horny, but careful!

Surprised the dads never got each other off. With so much happening around the clock, I was expecting at least a dad handy. Perhaps dads finally doing the taboo they refused their wives while alive; bobbing the knob and then wanking the other onto the tits of the other's girl.

Very much enjoyed reading it!!

It is evident that that you enjoy writing and describing sex. I for one loved reading it. Young adults learning and and experimenting without being forced is so sexy and that they do it with older males that they love and trust makes it even hotter.

Once again THANKS!

Lovely story with nice writing style - It needs just a tad bit of proofreading though - I especially enjoyed the colloquial Aussie vernacular. However, you seemed to have slipped up a just bit when you attributed words like "fancy" and "keen" to the Americans - Just curious: why do so many stories of this genre seem to have the female protagonists as having "long red hair"? - I'm so glad the males wore board shorts instead of those 'faggot' speedos favored by so many writers - I felt that Chloe was maybe just too aggressive, but I guess that was necessary to accelerate the plot line forward - Then, there was the pseudo Dom/Sub thing between Travis an Chloe. Eh? - Sorry, but I thought the combined sex scenes with both dads towards the end were way to protracted. - Oh yeah., you seem to have a tit fetish - Regardless, you've still got an eight star story here. . . . :-)

I know many people are just here for a quick wank, like the brave “anonymous” that posted 25 days before me, but I LOVED this… great story, 5*

I haven’t looked yet, but if there’s no follow, there should be…

way way too long

Outstanding. I seldom read stories longer than 3 or 4 Chapters because they are usually boring. You kept my attention through all 16 chapters. I hope you write a follow up soon. I just added you to my favorite writers.

As a fellow Aussie, I loved this.

As a bloke, I loved this.

Hell, as a Homo Sapiens I loved this :-)

Long but very good

Very well written. Some great sex scenes and the build up was good. The swap ideal was nice . I read it in see sections I read at work and home so takes a while. I enjoy longer at times. Love a good foreplay in a story some times it takes to much for the decision to cross that line to go ahead or not. Yours was great. Thx. 5* again thx.

Lovely read! The intensity is such that it took me days to finish, one small piece at a time!!! 5*

I was enjoying but hen it just got too long and repetitive. The climax should have been when the girls swapped fathers but it was kinda down played, at least with Alissa and max. Just my 2 cens

Fantastic story Nikki, you’re one of the top authors on this site!

Thanks for sharing with us!

Nothing I've read comes even close to this. Amazing!

Are there any more swapping stories like this?

Omg Nikki, so absolutely depraved and debauched, sucking fucking wonderful totally insane levels of sexual pleasure. Just wish you would use the word cunt more frequently, much more intense than pussy. Cunt Quim, Cunny. Sex for me is Cock Cunt, Clit and Cum. I just adore cunt and squirting cunts especially along with getting drunk on cunt juice. Just love your stories. What would I not give to get strapped across two red hot teen cunts like these two. Cunt lapping sex maniac Lanc’s U. K.

I sort of struggled a bit with it at times , found it a bit repetitive it's a shame the holiday romance fizzled out that would have brought a bit more variety to the tale although I can see you had your hands full with what you'd got I often think it probably gets a bit like a juggler trying to keep a load of balls in the air,but I've always enjoyed your writing, it makes a change from all the American writers who all seem to write to the same format . I like your profile picture, if that's you you look very pretty, although I notice you are wearing a facemask in these covid days. Keep on writing your always a 5 🌟 writer to me. P. S.This is the second time of reading for me.