All Comments on 'The Debauching of Emily Ch. 01'

and you just know there is a BUT coming.

Your story line is interesting but you need to watch for the he/her spelling mistakes. Perhaps when you finish writing, leave it for a couple of days and then go back and read it through once again, I'm sure you'll pick up these little mistakes. Also, there is Spell Check which is my favourite item. Saves my dyslexic fingers a whole lot of trouble.

The other thing that is missing, our main male lead has no name... we have Emily. You mention Ted and Gladys but no male lead character's name. Is he a phantom?

Perhaps his name is revealed in chapter 2.

Regards

Jewellee

I swear I stare at these things a hundred times and don't pick up on some of those mistakes. One of these chapters has an intended spelling mistake because she's drunk. Chapter 2 should be up tomorrow. Haven't named him yet because it's from his perspective. I'll have to come up with a name. Any suggestions. I've been reading other 'debauching' stories. She not get debauched as much as just learning about the different types of sex. Read another story the other day that was true debauchery. Brilliant.

I read the other story by this author in the LW category and was not impressed. This story, though, I thoroughly enjoyed. The author created two interesting characters and wrote with a pace that urged me to read on. Emily was gently dipicted with tenderness that was very appealing and highly sexual. I quickly fell in love with her vulnerability and excitement. Well written, though I feel that the author is a female after reading two stories.