All Comments on 'The Devil's Pact Pt. 33'

You sucked the fun out of sex rendering it both disturbing and yet painfully boring.

If you reread your previous chapters and stories, it the same sex over and over and over and over and over and over

And over.

It never really changes. Of course, in order to keep people reading, you make more it more grotesque, more outlandish, more unbelievable because that’s all you got.

Porn is ok; but how many do you keep watching after you orgasm? Mainstream movies can be just as explicit, just as erotic but you’ll watch to the end.

And stories, like movies, need engaging, compelling characters: heroes, villains and the triumph of good over evil, not the triumph of evil over evil.