All Comments on 'The Dragon Bracelet Pt. 01'

Interesting start, writing a little stilted but experience will smooth it out. Looking forward to the the rest of the tale.

Promising start, hopefully you'll be posting chapters regularly.

Promising

Nice read - can’t wait to see where to take the story

Looking forward to the next chapters. The writing seems off.

Really interesting, looking forward to more. I suggest an editor or at least a good grammar check.

Please write in complete sentences.

Noticed a bit of bad wording, grammar and such. Been a while since properly writing stories, especially in english which is not my first language, but an edit with some fixes has been submitted. The "morning April morning" in the first sentence(!) made me die a bit inside. I may have been a bit to eager to get it submitted.

Nicely done.

I've no problem with sentence structure, but the "slutty Catholic school uniform" is just jarring. MY taste, to be sure..

Nice story please continue it. Grammar could be better but not forgivable even though English is not your native language it was very erotic!