All Comments on 'The Roommate Pt. 01'

Chapter 1 so far a replica of many other stories. Most likely possibilities: One - Ruby to Erin "Oh you were always the one. I was blind I'll dump James and we'll live in lust forever." Second: James wakes up and sees whats happening. Ruby and Erin stop giggle and ask him to join them and the threesome ensues.

Now I can be completely wrong and chapter two is something that makes a paradox look like an oxymoron.

Not trolling. Just hoping for a proper twist.

Fun, wonderfully erotic piece — like the two heroines you’ve created. Not sure where you are taking your characters as this is pt. 1, but can imagine a few directions with/without James. Hoping for the latter.

Welcome to the site, and thank you for your first offering. Very alluring, highly graphic narrative. I'm glad you labelled it as a "Pt. 01" right from the get-go.

In terms of your writerly craftsmanship, you have one tendency that I find jarring. Repeatedly you have estblished the subject as "me and ___" instead of "___ and I . . ." Has that become a new standard in the UK?

very nicely done. The lovemaking scene was tender, and romantic. Liked that especially.

Very sweet tale, I look forward to reading more

A lovely story, very hot. It reminds me of one I wrote years ago about straight girl sex but never added to this site. You've inspired me to add mine. Please keep writing