by DinaParker69
Proofread/edit and brush up on your grammar . . . found it a bit too dry and strained, but with some work it could be a great piece
Thank you for the comments, wolf9696 and RedArrowKuczynski. :)
This story is most definetly continuing, I have basically the major plot lines until the end done (so maybe, maybe, Emma and Rachel may yet find themselves in intimate quarters. Maybe ;) ), but any feedback on the writting and the story is greatly appreciated.
As for the Emma / Emily thing, I'm not a native English speaker. I assumed that Emma was a diminutive for Emily and for what I gather it can be used in that fashion. But to avoid confusion, I'll stick with Emma from now on.
It's too bad Emma/Emily (which is it? You couldn't seem to make up your mind!) didn't get a phone call from Rachel, leading to Emma finding them and helping out, so that he got stuffed from both ends. Other than that, an excellent read!