All Comments on 'The extramile in Hollywood Pt. 01'

Great start.

Firstly, an excellent premise for a story. So great effort. But, but, but... please get an editor to look over what you write. Seriously, there were not dozens but HUNDREDS of errors of words and phrases. All those mistakes detract from the quality of the story. Given that probably English isn't your first language, going by how you structure your sentences, then you did well. But your ratings would be so much higher if either an editor or someone with a good English writing background cast their eyes over it. Thanks again and keep writing. Cheers.

You are a tease. Need more chapters quickly!

@LenardSpencer

Thank you for the feedback, English is indeed not my first language. I've been posting on Reddit for quite some time and I use editors there. Unfortunately, they didn't have time to edit this story for me, because this is not the main story I'm writing right now. I didn't know that Literotica has a dedicated part for editors so I hit a couple of them up. So hopefully the next part will be edited without my mistakes. Thank you so much and I hope you will enjoy the next [hopefully] edited part!

Please continue!

Great story with good plot, Very excited to read next chapters, Hopefully waited for the new chapters.

Great story with good plot, very excited to read the next chapters, Hopefully waiting for next new chapters.