All Comments on 'The Family Pt. 05'

Good job! I would encourage you to work with an editor, the punctuation needs some work.

Thank you for writing this.

Very good. Think you should add a few chapters to this, was waiting for the boys to hook up.

Echoing the editor comment, while these stories have turned me on considerably, I am distracted by use of the word "messaging" when the intent is "massaging"; personally I would much prefer to have my cock massaged and to massage breasts and other feminine parts.

All in all, a great series, but that type of inadvertent error becomes a distraction.

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