All Comments on 'The Gretchen Chronicles Ch. 01'

A real Loving Wife, a rare 5* from me

JJ

Half page chapters suck. If it's long enough for chapters, it's long enough for two or three pages.

Went nowhere, more like an opening page than a chapter.

Nice...

I enjoyed that. I hope you leave it with the togetherness and the erotic games of the two. It would be a shame if the two drift apart!

The ‘Loving’ in the LIT category of ‘Loving Wives’ is ironic, not literal. Since the narrator reported them as married, Sweetie needs to do something MUCH more adventurous than this eventually. Right now, Hubby is the adventurous party, but Sweetie did not leave for work unhappy.

unrated as yet! Currently, it looks like Erotic Coupling! Too brief!

Wow, this appears to be a real loving family. I, too, really want it to continue in this vein. It is sexy and it hasn't made me cringe with distaste over infidelity.

Thanks

I have a feeling the other shoe is about to drop soon. Maybe breaking it up into smaller chapters will generate more positive reviews and ratings in some of the chapters and not in others.

Where's the story? This was an opening paragraph.

Nice start.... don't mess up this loving couple! It's a testament to your writing that you can make us care about fictional characters! Remember...HEA!

Thanks to all for the comments, both positive and negative. The story continues!

An FYI tidbit. In real life I lived in a place that had a shower as described. It didn't come with a Gretchen, a serious oversight on my part.

A very nice start to an interesting tale.

My only complaint is that you left me wanting more.

Maybe future chapters will be diff, but this sounds more like EC or Romance.