All Comments on 'The Hard Truth Ch. 01'

Very good start , eagerly awaiting more chapters.

This begs for a continuation....

Good beginning, look forward to more!

good start hope you are planning more

A very good story. I enjoyed that. Very good first story. Hopefully you keep it up. Well done.

I will keep an eye out for more of your stories.

Just to give you some areas to improve on.

1 a couple of spelling and grammar mistakes. Get an editor. Or finish the story, leave it alone for 3 day then reread and correct your own mistakes.

2 make the sex scenes longer. What Jacob is doing. How Alexa is reacting. Vice versa.

3 give inner dialogue for Jacob. What is he thinking and reacting. Doubt, scared, excited etc.

Great first story. Hopeful for more chapters. 5 stars. Keep up the great work

A good first story. I would second JoopExcite's recommendations as well.

I second everything people have already said. You gave us a description of Alexa looks like but not jacob. Flesh out the char actors and add background. This could become a great big series. There is tons of room for many adventures.

This was a wonderful first story. I hope that he keeps Alexa for his personal use in the office. Outside of the office they could have plenty of adventures. That small raise she offered to Jacob would be insignificant to the money she could bring in for him as a camgirl, stripper or escort. Can't wait for Chapter 2, and 3, etc.

3* Not enough thought or care. He needs to temprarily lose the power if he doesn't obey it's rules, whatever they are.