All Comments on 'The Haunting'

Boo!

. . . it’s funny.

I sort of pictured Steve’s ghost merging with Deb to produce the bone chilling cold, but that wasn’t specified. The author could have added some spookier elements.

This category has gone full misogyny

Happy Halloween Peoples!.....Needless to say that their relationship got frosty!★★★★★ WOOF!

A Halloween's flash story...3*

This fantasy brings out the true feeling of retribution a person would enjoy if it were possible. But novel writing allows this type of storytelling.

Thanks for sharing your diversion into the macabre

Turning the hot sex of the evildoers into self-inflicted COLD damage!

Editing would have improved the story, though.

Thanks for the freezer-BTBs tale!

Decent idea, but editing issues and gaps in the action hurt.

Great story, keep up the good work. 👍

This is what you call a multi-tiered BTB/B. First the bitch & bastard are burned with intense cold, then for the rest of their miserable lives they will burn with passions & desires they can never fulfill. Then they will burn in hell for their crimes.

I love it! 5 stars.

ltpw

Fun!

Scary bad.

Have a blessed day thanks for a funny read.

Not loving wives. And this was just silly.

Redeeming quality. Don't waste your time reading this drivel. Wish I hadn't.

This was a fat lot of nothing.

Yawn...

Now this is the true justice of any cheaters - well done.

5/5

How is it misogyny? The man and the woman EACH suffered, so why isn't it misandrist?

It might have been more fun to prolong it, with more and more subtle punishments, but okay as a flash.

I love the new FTB stories in LW. Who woulda believed it? Freeze The Bitch and Bastard. Hope it catches on.

...but I do know that you probably don’t go on to a ‘heavenly reward’ right after you’ve just frozen a mans dick off in your ex-wife’s vagaina?

Whether or not the rather grotesque btb was deserved or not, two wrongs don’t make a right. I think I’m pretty sure that this is not how you get into the kingdom of heaven, or the nice bit of whatever comes next, assuming anything does.

Are you fucking kidding me? He is dead. Dead. Dead. Dead. God some people are too stooooopid for words. Fun little creep show. I liked it.

A good Halloween Story that I enjoyed very much and gave you a 5 star rating.

This is one of the most interesting BTB story that I've read. Nothing erotic about it, but amusing.

Literotica still needs to have a Hateful Husbands category.

Whatever power there may be, it obviously granted him the power to do that, it presumably intended for him to use it. If not, why wasn't his spirit immediately sent to its ultimate destination; unless this was meant to be a test?

You sir, are most certainly LW's resident expert on non erotic stories. We need a separate section for Stupid Stories about Worms In Mystical Mudholes. You're the expert there too.

"I've been promised to be the one to send you to the gates of hell when the time comes" - This implies that the "power" has endorsed his actions.

i wanted to hear more about the aftermath, but it wasn't needed.

Ouch! Losing your Genitals like that...That's Gotta Hurt!....Makes my eyes water just thinking about it!!!!!! .....Happy Halloween Everyone!.....Don't drink and Drive!..... PD..55 WOOF!

You wrote a taught story that was different from your other works posted here. I didn't rate it, because I do feel LW wasn't the place for this, but had it been in Horror or Fantasy I'd have given you 4 stores.

It's no knock on the story, I'm just a sucker for having actual "loving wives" in this category. Still, my personal preferences aside, a good story is a good story.

yall know this is just a story right? lol idgits ty for the read was a fun read

The wife here was "loving" in the way most wives in Loving Wives are loving.

If you want TRUE loving wives, you should go to Romance.

Nuf said

Ahem

What's amazing is the depths to which this category has sunk. Used to be clever and sexy and now it's infested with garbage.

Anemic

A story about a man and a woman who murder a man. The murdered man returns as a ghost and torments them both equally.

MISOGYNY!

...wait, what?

Anyway, not much to it, but not bad for a Halloween flash tale. I'm hesitant to declare it a chilling new take on BTB, but...

Thanks for the story.

Cog

and obviously inspired by reading too much Shakespeare.

and you did.

Thanks for trying.

Should be in erotic horror

Fuckers got what they deserved. Hope he gets to fulfill his last statements to them. Wonder how long it will take them to kill themselves.

Hanging question. The flaw is that if Joe and Debbie knew Jason was taking an unconscious Steve home from the party, how did he end up I the driver's seat, in a wreck? A loose end the police would surely investigate.

For variety you might have started with Steve in a ghostly quandary an then let the back story be a recollection.

Still a 4 star effort.

A fun story. 5* for the novelty value. They say its very difficult to predict a flash freeze.

I wish the happy couple a long life, they earned it. What a shame he misplaced his hot dog.

I suppose this gives them a whole new meaning to packing their bags when going away.

I wish this story was in another category so I could have avoided it. Two stars, sorry.

write a second chapter to he does come again as a live human and get his revenge

How was he going to his heavenly reward if he was going to haunt them for the rest of their lives?? . . . . Or was that his heavenly reward??? Odd sort of heaven . . . Still fun the second time around.

Read this again , still love it. Rodryder, funny thing about your comment. That's exactly the way I feel about your stories.

Great revenge story with a difference 5*

Totally bogus but I loved it!

As a Costco member at the time of his murder, he got the Heavenly Rewards with Double Revenge package at a discount.

Enjoyed the story. Unique perspective on a not so funny tale but well contrived

Was okay at best. You could have done so much better with a haunting.

Freeze the B#tch! FTB a new category!