All Comments on 'The Housecleaner'

Incredibly hot. I hope this was not a one time occurrence and that Marcus isn't fucking her as well.

Nice story. The author ought to learn how to spell ‘hose’. A ‘house’ is something you live in.

I really enjoyed this story. It's a good mix of embarrassment and playfulness, with a satisfying ending. My one critique would be that I think it would be more effective if it was told from the first person. If the reader only sees things from Dan's perspective, there's more of a buildup to Ana finally submitting and undressing in front of him. I'd cut out the parts where we hear Ana's thoughts, and bring more focus to Dan's process.