by Alfamann
As I said in my comment at the end of the series. Her family and aunt should have stop it before it got out of hand in page 2 of the first chapter.
Why is the story set in America?
The author is obviously from the UK.
Americans don’t use the following expressions:
Bloody
Arse
Have you heard of the concept of “willing suspension of disbelief” or the idea of “write about what you know about.”
You obviously don’t know about the US.
It certainly does not belong in Literotica.
Lousianians, if that's the plural noun, do not say "arsehole" or "bloody". Other than that, it's good
24B bra size? If I understand the measuring system correctly, that is a really tiny torso. Probably a typo.
What does deliverance have to do with Louisiana? the show was not about that state.
I agree with ChrisTor22. And I didn't even see one grammatical error or typo. I like that especially because it makes the story flow easier. I look forward to more.
4 stars.
As usual, good 'laying' of the foundation!! Also as usual not quite long enough to be able to sink our teeth into your latest "victim" but leaving us wanting to see exactly how far Uncle and the cousins will humiliate and expose and abase Jen. Keep it up and NOT loo long in between episodes?? LOL