All Comments on 'The Jesus Incident'

Clicked “Like It” but not so sure. Like the two MCs, Vicki and Sly, and how you present them across her escort adventures (both believable and uniquely interesting with just the right amount of sassy humor). Like the theme around which you create her adventures, and the sex tuned nicely to the particular adventure. This “non-consent” leaves the reader uncomfortable as intended with upbeat ending. So what not to like? Too much packed into a short piece — too very diametrically different scenes both with potential to explore your MCs, especially Vicki, yet each rather abbreviated/not well developed, including the sex. The first scene failed to convey the fear that was there, while the second did not reach the intended intensity. You created two short scenes at opposite ends of the emotional spectrum for Vicki all within one night, and maybe that is the take home — serious moments consistent with the theme.