All Comments on 'The Lesbian Maker Ch. 02: Epic Lesbian Orgy'

Claudia and Vic should start a relationship in the next installment

Your command of the English language leaves much to be desired.

In fact, part 3 is exactly that .. and published, soon.

kind of needed toys, but excellent.

Again, same advice. You need an editor to help iron out the bugs. The ideas are great, it's the execution that needs improving.

i did like this chapter better, so erotic and well done at the party.

I wish there were no men involved.

Loved it. Wonderful.

Will Claudia become open lovers and dedicated seducers of straight women.

In my fantasy they already have. LOL

Keep up the great work.

Who is MARIE?

Who is VAL?

There are a lot of spelling mistakes and atrocious grammar. I got lost in the story and quit reading it. In fact after critiquing it, I will disregard the story entirely. Need grammar and spell checkers on this.

Susan putted (I think you mean PUT) her legs beneath each side of Claudia.

If you are doing the story, try to put in the full name with parentheses around the abbreviation eg. Victoria (Vic)