All Comments on 'The Lion, The Witch...'

Not bad for a first time writer. Now you just just have to keep the stories cumming!

Is this meant to be a parody? If not, it's laughably badly written with missing words, sentence fragments, typos, wrong punctuation and words ("spear" instead of "spur"), etc. Everyone needs to stop this idiotic "you" stuff. I did NOT do any of those things.

"His cock was scratching at all your points" What does that mean? Does his cock have spines on it, like a cat's? And no woman would enjoy having her cervix rammed.