by bumpercars
Altissimus,
Not everybody can struggle hard! :)
I'm glad you liked the story and the word choice. Thanks for reading.
Film noir fun and an extra point for so many legitimate uses of the word "ravishment". Impregnation isn't a fetish I particularly enjoy but your writing is quality, your images vivid, the struggles real... though perhaps a little half-hearted. Easy 5 stars.
NewOldGuy77.
I'll have to keep those elements in mind in case I do another chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed it even without them.
(Also, just so you know, my story "The Hard Kiss Goodnight" is a sequel to this one, although Literotica's series system doesn't recognize it as such.)
As a film noir fan, I loved it, but it needed more fog, a fat man with a hired gunsel, and maybe a 1937 Chrysler to be perfect. 5 stars.
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
I'm always open to new ideas. I can't promise that I'll make it into a story, as not every idea makes it that far, but I'm willing to give it a try. Send it to me through the Send Feedback option or a comment if you want.
Great story! I thoroughly enjoyed it. Your detail was on point while maintaining character throughout. I am not much of a writer, but I have an idea that might be up your alley if you would like me to send it to you to write?
I'll see. I did have fun with this universe. Even if I don't get around to doing a sequel for this one, I do plan to continue writing, even if it goes slowly.
Any chance of a sequel story? This was the most fun I've had reading something on the site in ages.
I'm glad you liked it. I had fun with the story here. I was aiming for a lot of the themes and tropes of film noir but about 50% less grim, and having Samantha solve the mystery seemed to fit with that.
Its not often that I find erotic stories with an interesting plot! This was very good, I enjoyed the whole Detective backdrop and I admit, it was nice seeing Samantha win in the end.
Thank you for your compliments. I'm a fan of your stories as well.
What a coincidence- I read "The Big Sleep" just yesterday. Fun, playful story, well executed and you nailed the hard boiled tone. Definitely Hammett on Wry :-)
Yep, I wasn't aiming for dead seriousness with this one. I'm glad you liked it.
I guess that was part of the point. Very fun story.
Solid writing. Good use of narration switch. The fetishes are well inserted and the sex is easy to envision. I don't even have an impregnation fetish but I liked it a lot. The plot is just simple enough to not distract from the sex while still being interesting enough with a light twist.