by Mackenzie Taylor
Okay. I suppose this was an introductory story. But, really, what actually happened and why should I care? Way too short and there is no reason to read any more even if it is continued in the future. A total waste of time. Sorry.
I don't know, i'm kind of interested to see where she goes with this. There is potential here, but it's rather short to actually have much of an opinion.
.. but like the other comments say, you need to write more to really capture interest. Seems well written. :)
OMG.... Please write more of this. I laughed so hard I almost peed myself!