by Mackenzie Taylor
OMG.... Please write more of this. I laughed so hard I almost peed myself!
.. but like the other comments say, you need to write more to really capture interest. Seems well written. :)
I don't know, i'm kind of interested to see where she goes with this. There is potential here, but it's rather short to actually have much of an opinion.
Okay. I suppose this was an introductory story. But, really, what actually happened and why should I care? Way too short and there is no reason to read any more even if it is continued in the future. A total waste of time. Sorry.