All Comments on 'The O Train'

nix ironical. It’s just ‘ironic’!

Nicely done! Will there be a follow up? I think there were only two other oopsies, I caught. The one I definitely remember was site, when it should have been sight. So two or three little things in a couple of pages. I liked the character, April, but I think it could have been a tad better had April and Stacy have had some verbal interaction. But I also want to give you a solid’ nice job’ for a first story!

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YOU'RE AWESOME, HOT & TASTY!!!!!!!!!!

WELL DONE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Wow, short but sexy as hell 5

needs a part two! loved it!

excellent!

That was awesome. 5/5 well deserved stars. I see it's your first story. Hope there are many more to come.

Dewey Cheatham

Awesome first submission. Loved this story. I'll be looking for be watching for more of your work. NICE JOB

Bill

Please have more!

Great story. Loved the erotic tension that built at the party, then went into remission on the train until the two were alone when April couldn't resist the erotic approach of Catwoman that ended explosively. Definitely needs a sequel (or two) where April explores this new side of her experience, first with Stacy, then perhaps with others of her own circle? Just some thoughts.

Powerful and explosive story 5/5. You could write same story from catwoman side.

Please Dooooooo More!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I wanted more !!!!!! I wanted to give your story 7 stars !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Found this piece listed as a “similar story” with Melissababy’s Halloween piece - glad I stopped to read. Odd that I missed when you posted in September. Intensely erotic from voyeur scene at party to train seduction. Hope you have more to share whether April calls Stacey or not (she should); well crafted short erotic tale.