All Comments on 'The One He Let Get Away'

romance at all should be in non-erotic

I dont get it. She gave him a second chance? Then they had great times? Now it three weeks later after he dumps her? Why did he meed a second chance and why did he then dump her?

Ok, so you're not with her. B o r i n g.

Putting the odd fascination with alcohol aside, this wasn't so much a story as perhaps a writing exercise. Why did they break up? Why was she there? How do the characters grow. None of that was present in this scene. Perhaps added to something larger it would make for a better story. Perhaps an actual story. Your writing skills are not bad, keep at it!

Agree with NarwalRider. Your writing mechanics are good, but what was the point? It’s just a scene without any of the details that make a fully fleshed-out story.

Shit story! Goes nowhere!