All Comments on 'The Out of Town Guest'

Sorry to say he wasn't a "Out of Town Guest"...They were the guests in his hotel room...Where slept the husband? Too many flaws...1*

1* nothing more needs to be said

Don’t quite know how to rate this one. It’s not too bad for your second effort. In fact, it sounds like it would have if you had been relating a true event. I try to help new writers, even though some claim I’m not qualified for that and they may have something going there; however since those who say that never try to help, I’ll continue.

Constructive criticism—tease us more. Show your clothes slipping off one piece at a time; show you pulling his boxers down only to be hit in the face by a hard cock. Milk the scene of you nibbling on his mushroom head for all its worth…you get the idea—make it sexy as possible.

Most important of all—don’t get discourage by comments from those who can only write poison notes. Your work will never be as bad as they claim.

Good Luck and keep on writing! cd

Another writer trying to perpetuate the myth that husbands like to watch their wives being fucked by someone else. If anyone fucked my wife I'd cut their bollocks off.

Husband doesn't count, he's either her pimp or a happy cuck.

Lucie, Although you haven't asked for it, I would like to give you three pieces of advise: First, carolinadreamer is pretty much spot on. Second, the detractors aren't worth giving one second of your time or attention. 26thNC appears in numerous comment sections and he pretty much says the same thing every time. These dumb comments almost always follow a notice that is clearly given before the story describing the subject with the suggestion that if such stories are offensive, the reader shouldn't read it. I suspect the anonymous critics are the same. They follow stories knowing they will not like them and read them only to offer worthless criticism. None of them, as far as I can tell, have written anything of their own. Third, I am retired and am writing my first novel. To prepare for this I immersed myself in books, articles and seminars done by some of the most well-known writers in the country. They all teach one thing in common: ignore critics and keep on writing if you want to be come an accomplished author. You told a good story and I think that you clearly have good potential as a writer. Keep on writing and don't listen to any of these limp-dicks that probably prattle on because they are unconsciously afraid that women will reject them and are acting out like immature children. You write well; keep on truckin'.

Well written or not, it's still nothing more than a story about a whore and her cuck husband. You obviously read.nothing but trash like this if you think I make the.Sam comment every time. What else can you say about a cuckold story. I haven't seen much of your work, but of course you're writing a Novel , Hemingway.

The writing is ok but the giddiness of two people thinking there isn’t an issue with hubby #1 cheating on his wife and young family. If the cuck couple want to share and let the wife be the slut she is, how about finding single guys. Oh, always nice to see cucks Knowing their roles and picking up the sluts clothes Cuck a Doodle Do

Some people do enjoy seeing their spouse getting fucked. I know I do. 5 stars to writer. I know your new at this. May I suggest hitting more kinks to spread out your appeal. Example, stranger could be black, she could be fertile and pull off his rubber to take his cum for preg risk sex. Good job, we have done pretty much the same thing!