All Comments on 'The Path Taken, The Path Unknown Pt. 02'

I was surprised that he collared her so soon. I was expecting that to take a little time.

In editing, take note of the tense. In the climax, you changed from past tense to present and it was a bit distracting. In general just reread to edit typos.

There was a lot of scattered emotion in the anal sex scene. I wonder what else you have planned.

Keep it realistic. Was that really her first time having anal?