All Comments on 'The Personals Ch. 01'

SUPER hot 🔥 story!!!

It is gentle, not gentile, but good story anyway

Wow!!!!! Please continue!

What a WONDERFUL story! I do hope there is a chapter 2 where the relationship continues. KUDOS! 5 stars!

Very good! Please continue.

That's hot.

This story is HTAZFK!! 🔥🚒🔥🚑🥵👍👏🧑🏽‍🚒🔥💥🌶🚁⚛️🆘💯💦💦H💥HOT!!

Hot to read about their fuck

Awesome story sure wish I had a daughter

Excellent story, hope there's more. But please, for the love of God, it's "tongue", not "tognue"

Awesome waiting for future chapters

Beautiful sexy story!! Can’t wait for more!!

Very Nice introduction to the adventures of Ashley and Robert. Wow the first day this story has been available.

And myself and others are looking forward to the further experiences of 2 new lovers. Hmmm, does Mom have

to go out of town on business? Or does Mom suggest perhaps Katie should tag along with her dad like she used to when her Dad would go out of town on Business. One never knows who is keeping what secret. Thank you for a great start, Chapter 1 as it were.

""I don't want you to be gentile,".

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She wants him to be Jewish?

Very sexy hot 🔥🔥. I hope they hook up more

Great story but you should definitely have someone edit the story before you post. There were quit a few spelling errors

First things first: Have you never heard of Proof Reading? Have you no spell check, or at least a dictionary? When a reader has to break his concentration just to make sense around spelling and punctuation errors, it is annoying at the very least and interrupts the flow. The story? Predictable for sure, bland, no character development, and, all in all, it seemed to be rushed. Not at all a bad premise, but additional descriptive details would have made it a really memorable read. This is my first time leaving a comment, but I honestly intended mine to be constructive criticism. Keep on keepin' on!

So naughty; yet, so hot! Great story.

Waiting for more

This is great story. I gave it 4 ☆☆☆☆ and favorites it.

I love daddy/daughter stories. I love it even more if there is some sort of surprise to it (like the ad in the personals). But, and I am trying to be nicer than the anonymous poster, please proofread or ask for an editor. I have read many stories that have a few mistakes and I can wave it off, but there were enough here to pull me out of the story.

Also as far as the story itself, I would have personally put in more hesitation before they start fucking in a public park, especially if there will be more chapters. But if this is the whole story it works, aside from needing a wrap up of what happened next. For example did they keep fucking, did mom or Brian find out, was there an accidental pregnancy (ok that one is just another of my favorites)

Please don't ruin this by adding mom or Brian into their secret sex life, honestly I'd rather have no chapter 2 if that's the case.

Seriously literotica took away deleting your own message?

I realize me suggesting you proofread and then I didn't proofread my message was a little hypocritical of me. So "favorites" is supposed to say "favorited"

Waiting for chapter 2

Esperando parte 2

That is so intensely hot that it makes me wish I had a daughter to share it with.