All Comments on 'The Pilot'

Whore and the Cuck.

Tags and description said it all. Just another cuck story. 1*

Each to their own I suppose

Not too bad for a first story. I assume you want constructive feedback, so here goes—you did a good job of setting the scene. In fact I could almost see the couple and their surroundings in the opening paragraphs, but I do think it would have been better if you had went full porn and described the action more.

However, you seem to be aiming more toward erotic in which case I think we needed more drama—maybe hubby shouldn’t be so accepting of being cuckolded, but that would have required major changes in your setup….

I only caught one major screw-up but it did jerk me out of the story and made me go back and review what I’d read; which is never a good thing. I refer to this copied from your story:

(As we scroll through photos we occasionally come across pics taken in warmer locations of each other in swimsuits and she boldly compliments his fit body in wet trunks standing in knee deep beach water. His package is clearly outlined by the thin wet fabric clinging to his skin and she comments "it's pretty obvious that the water you're standing in isn't very cold at all".)

The problem: They are clearly at the couples house and the pilot is from out of town—how can they be looking at pics of him in wet trunks?

Yeah, I know, that is picky but that’s the difference between creative writing and really good creative writing. Anyway you seem to have talent and I hope you continue writing. Cd

PS: one personal bitch I have that I hope you’ll never commit—if you write multiple chapter stories, for goodness sake write all chapters BEFORE you submit the first one and don’t fail to submit them all. I just finished the first chapter of a ‘to be continued” story that really captured my interest, but hasn’t been continued since 2012.

Oh look a new pathetic skank and cuckold story writer. How boring.

Fuck that’s hot.

For fucks sake, all you cry babies about stories you don’t like. Grow the fuck up and simply scroll to the next one. I swear people have absolutely no common sense any more.

HAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAAAAA

1st time story with this new name, not even trying to change the manner in which you write, after two paragraphs your usual mental illness kicked in and gave us the same tired story you always write...strictly by the numbers. Actually that would be an improvement, and that is something you've avoided in all your iterations.

Wife sharing, and whorewife without the cuck tag.

Guess he's not getting it either. So odd. Thanks for occupying that end of the bell shaped curve; somebody's got to do it. And thanks for the effort.

I enjoyed your story. Thank you and keep writing them please.

What a vile woman

Sexy story, hope there is more to cum.

10 stars to the writer, I loved this story. This something we have done a zillion. Times. Wife ways plays a game with guys she wants to pick up. She has s butterfly tattood on one tit and a rose on the other. The challenge for the stranger is to land the butterfly on the rose. This always leads to her oobs being fondled a lot whe eveyo e has fun. A great bar game! Great story great writing thanks