All Comments on 'The Price of Honesty'

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Anonymousover 11 years ago

"WHACK!"

And I quote:

WHACK!

And I quote again:

WHACK!

And I quote once [twice?] again:

WHACK!

"What happens to selfish sluts?"

"They get punished!" Kimberly screamed starting to sound desperate.

WHACK!

Each blow felt like an explosion of fire.

WHACK!

Tears began streaming down from Kimberly's face.

WHACK!

The pain was becoming unbearable.

WHACK!

"STOP!" Kimberly screamed. "Stop! Please... just stop!"

"Do you promise to stop being a selfish slut?"

"YES!"

WHACK!

"Do you promise to be a good girl from now on?"

"YES!"

WHACK!

[...]

THIS IS [[[[SO]]]] FUCKING STUPID

1 STAR [DA BOMB]

Anonymousalmost 11 years ago

Part 3?

Don't be too discouraged by negative feedback - Everyone makes errors starting out. It's a good set-up and could do with finishing, even if just to draw a line under the story

Anonymousover 10 years ago

PART 3!!!

This is all really good!!! Please continue this and finish it! Don't be like the other writers, pathetic people, who never finish an amazing story they start!!!! >:l KEEP IT GOING ITS GOOD!

Anonymousover 9 years ago

It would have been hot in an alternate universe but really gross

the story is overall well developed and has a good plot but can I say how much I want to kill the mysterious woman for making Kimberly give her oral sex. It is really gross deplorable and depraved. Hopefully you continue the story and I would like to see Kimberly take revenge on her!!!!!

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