All Comments on 'The Reluctant'

A masseuse is always female. A better word to use is masseur.

"She suspected he was having an affair. Too many dinners on week nights out of town. Too many weekend trips with the boys. She thought about it and said to herself I have a private little place to go when I need to get revitalized. Why not enjoy it for a while" -- Sounds like a plan until it becomes a disaster. All she has are suspicions? Right! Great excuse to cheat on your husband and start your new life as an adulterer. Nothing says "I love you honey!", like breaking your marriage vows! I would love to see her theories on her marriage dissolve in a pool of her tears...but...I can see that this is going to be a cheating, cheaters, cheat-fest where she finds her husband is unfaithful too and she proceeds to be inducted into the Adultry Hall of Fame as the "Most Depraved Newcumer" of the year. -- 1☆

WOW, that is one of the best first efforts I have read. EXTREMELY well presented, wonderfully explicit and sexy as hell. The closing remarks about her possibly cheating husband were disjoint, unnecessarly giving her 'permission' to enjoy herself. Not hint of whether she will ever visit again, or if he billed her for her treatment. Keep 'em coming, but no need to revisit this woman. GREAT!

A married beautiful woman? What does it matter if she's married or not, and of course, beautiful, why would you want her to be ugly?

Starts out mad at hubby... ends with hubby probably having an affair... logic, I can cheat and not feel bad. Make sure chapter two includes the STD's she'll get from fucking a guy who spends his days having sex with a wide variety of married cheating sluts.

You brought her husbands cheating in way too late to be anything but a rationalization on her part ... might as well pour out the rest of the excuses and it was only sex and it diddn't hurt you stuff as well. Then describe the divorce

Sequel, please. Great erotic writing

A terrific story, it was very inspiring!

Why is this couple married?

Well, my first thought was that the guy is a masseur, not a masseuse. strike one right in the beginning. otherwise some of the usual spelling errors. like "their" for "there" or something. Those common things. But otherwise, it was a really hot, descriptive story. The score went up as the story progressed. No comment on the ending as I was done with the story when she was driving home.

great! more, please

Cheap. Maybe in the sequel someone will write how she handles giving the husband a venereal disease. That sequel should probably be in the Humor category. Thanks for the effort.

Goose/Gander. I know guys JUST like him. They're the ones that lament, "We had the perfect marriage, but one day I discovered that my wife had been cheating!" It's like guys who own a boat and can't understand why it sinks at the dock one day. Vigilance and situation awareness....

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I'd suggest that you use dialogue more. You also did a lot of "telling," but "showing" is what keeps a reader interested. Third-person POV really lends itself to showing. It's a decent beginning. 4/5

Good first story. You will get better over time with fleshing out the characters

Cheating cunt gets rubbed by an asshole.

this story has me wanting a massage

Title is weird" "The Relectant" The reluctant what? The reluctant cheater?

@sbrooks103x

A married beautiful woman? What does it matter if she's married or not, and of course, beautiful, why would you want her to be ugly - I didn't read anywhere that said he wanted her ugly.

The fantasies of the mind and body

3 stars at best. There are way too many misspelled words (conditional/conditioner, their/there, etc.) and then a sudden change from third person omniscient to first person and then back, all of which are jarring to the reader. I would respectfully suggest that you find yourself a good editor.

These comments are assholes, like just flick your bean or beat off and enjoy it man. No reason to attack an author. Remember it’s “constructive” criticism not just being mean

Good story! I have a private trainer who comes to my home once a week. He works me hard for an hour and then fucks me harder the rest of the afternoon. Both of us are married, but the spouses are clueless. We happily do things to each other that our spouses won't. Life is good.