All Comments on 'The Rise and Fall of Jordan M. Ch. 02-04'

A very very interesting plot. I love how you developed the characters and the protagonist/antagonist complexities. It is like a reversal of the old Pinocchio story. Hopefully, you write part 3 and tie the story back to why Jordan sought treatment from the doctor and his ultimate treatment. Some additional thoughts. Can Jordan find a way to get back at Barbera possibly through Dylan; two things to consider. 1. Barbera injected him with an experimental drug without Jordan's consent. She could end up ruined and in prison for years? 2. How does Dylan feel about Jackie? Does he inject her with Veritas? 3. How does he feel about her cheating on him? 4. What about the relationship with Edith? Does it grow...play on words lol. Have fun! I can't wait to see what you do with it.

Great story! Keep it going, love to see his Mom involved!!!!