All Comments on 'The Seventh Date Pt. 01 - Femdom'

So you started with the seventh date. OK. But I sure would have liked to read about the fifth date when they fist had sex. And details about what happened on the sixth date when she let him be in charge. How did that go? What did he do to her? How did she react? Did he have fun doing that? Did she seem to have fun?

Excellent story and right to the point. It is a very good start.

I enjoyed this first part to your story. You asked for writing advice. The writing is fine but after you write a story you may want to put it aside for a few days before posting. Then you can proofread and catch the missing words of other errors before posting.

Looking forward to the next parts.

Pretty hot.