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by EdithvanMerwe

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 months ago

Good first submission. However you really need a native English speaker to edit your work. There are so many errors in spelling grammar and context that the story falls to be a cohesive whole.

EdithvanMerweEdithvanMerweabout 2 months agoAuthor

I have an editor on my laptop and I am a South African so my language is very different to others. But thank you for reading it I really appreciate it.

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Young at heart grandmother, writing short stories and poetry for fun but if I can ever sell them will do so in a heartbeat!!

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