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Click here"Dee, unless you break my heart and throw me over, I am yours forever. You are my one and only."
"That should scare the hell out of me but it doesn't. I feel relieved to know that you are my future. I have never trusted anyone as I trust you."
"Will you let me know when you are ready to make it official? Alan asked.
"Of course, and don't worry...it won't be that long, I promise.
Epilogue:
Dee and Alan had their problems like any other couple. Dee got cold feet and briefly broke off the relationship which caused Alan to seriously doubt if he wanted to live any longer. But, he decided that as long as there was a chance for a life with Dee , he would stick around. Seven weeks after she broke it off, she called him and wanted to talk.
"I'm ready to make our relationship official if the offer is still good." She said when they met at Rosa's
"The offer is still good."
"If you ask me, I will say 'yes'," Dee said and dropped her eyes.
Alan immediately dropped to his knees and retrieved a ring from his pocket.
"Dee, will you marry me?" He said simply.
"Yes, Alan I will mar... just a minute, where did you get the ring?"
"I've had it since our first date."
"Our first night alone together?"
"No, after our first lunch here at Rosa's."
Dee marveled at him, not quite sure how to take his presumption.
"How did you know?" She asked as he slid the ring on her finger.
She pulled him up and drew herself into his arms.
"It was the spark," He smiled and took her hand.
The spark was still there.
- COMMENTS
olddave5130 days agoYou left somethings unresolved.
The child support.
How did they become a blended family (since the children were so much of both their lives)?
Just why the ex was on welfare?
Could the ex's life style be a bad environment for his girls?
Did his girls ever even visit him?
Yes, a little detail on the breakup might have helped.
The story line was great but with just a few holes.
I was hoping see a sequel. Your story has so much potential for a series.
but maybe you have stopped writing, our loss.
Adamdavidsonover 1 year agoAuthorDear anonymous and reader from Germany, maybe I could have better told of the brief break up between Dee and Alan, but the the reality is this story was close to autobiographical. I romanticized here and there but my wife and I lived this general story line. She DID get cold feet and break up some weeks before the Holidays. I was extremely crestfallen and had weeks of tears and darkness, I can now understand the depression and discouragement that can motivate suicide but for the sake of my kids, I couldn’t go there. In January she called and we started dating again. We were married the following May. 14 weeks after we broke up, we exchanged our vow in one of the most joyous weddings I have ever seen. We’ve been married 30 years. Sorry you didn’t like that plot turn but that was how it happened! May the spark be with you!
Anonymousover 1 year agoWhat happened to Dee getting to know Alan/Adam’s son, Niles? I thought he was going to join them at the pizza parlor. Their children all meeting each other would have further cemented their relationship.
I agree with the comment about Dee getting cold feet at the end of the story. It’s like a bucket of ice water was thrown on the romance and took me out of the story. The bit about child support had nothing to do with the rest of the story. It had no impact at all.
a_reader_from_germanyalmost 2 years agoThe last paragraph about Dee breaking up with Alan "because she got cold feet" was like a figurative bucket of ice water poured over the feeling that you tried to kindle within the reader that these two had something extra special between them.
aforrestxover 2 years agoGreat story. One suggestion - remove the section regarding the ex-wife and child support. It doesn't add to the plot and it's very confusing with no resolution.
Anonymousabout 4 years agoThe middle of story was far too long. I just skimmed over mist of it. Far too protracted. The story at the beginning and the end was good and a good read as you got to know the couple but agree with previous comment about length.
barn650over 4 years agoWell, I have now read everything you’ve written and all have been well thought out as well as romantic. I hope you will continue to write (the longer the better). I use to look for short stories but you have ruined me. I especially like the stories with a little action adventure. Looking forward to future stories. I’m a guy but I’ve wondered if you are a guy or a lady. Just curious
Privates1stClassover 4 years agoseemed like an inferno between these two. Anyway, it was pretty hot.
I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Thanks.
