All Comments on 'The Sweater'

Really great story- erotic and believeable. look forward to more

like your story give us morefun and sexy.

Piece would be a lot more readable if you broke you large paragraphs up into many smaller ones. Re-read your grammar book. One thought = one paragraph. You have about fifty in one - hard to read.

Great story - ignore some remarks, this is neither a punctuation nor a grammar competiton!

Very well written story. A couple of your paragraphs are too long, and reading on a computer screen is harder than reading a sheet of paper, but it's not a big problem.

Fucking nude on the beach when no one else is around is second to no other fucking.

Could use more. very good.

After that pounding, she's yours. Apparently there is on worry of knocking her up? In that case , he can now keep fucking her until they get caught. Since her husband doesn't care, go with his wife catching them. She's more apt to go for a three some, since she loves fucking him too. You need a proofreader to clean it up, but good story line, and definitely open to more chapters if you like. Keep writing.

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