All Comments on 'The Tower'

Not perfect but awesome nonetheless! I love your intro! If you don’t like it get lost! I hate wimpy “oh I hope this is ok” intros!

Those two should have stayed the same when they left the dungeon, but with a little more self control. This could have made a great erotic adventure series.

this had such potential to be a series shame they went back to normal.

A couple grammatical errors but a good short story. Keep it up mate!

Disappointing ending, would have been interesting to see how the drama could have played out with Darla, or have another pair of adventurers go in but one of them is a (male) mage or wearing anti magic ring or pendant, and casts a dispel spell to get the girl out (with the magic futa spell still on the girl) and see what fun shenanigans happen after.

Jesus... someone really loves to hate jocks...but an amazing story I feel gaven would have learned a valuable lesson from the ass beating he got and treated darla like a princess forever. But every so often darla has to get the strap on out and put the bitch in check... lol