All Comments on 'The Trampoline'

If you had written the story in the Past Tense - "you parked, ... I watched as you came, ..." etc. the story would have been far more readable.

"Fill me up my inside" was one that was a little distracting, but I really did like the story, plot and delivery. My suggestion is to type it ouit, let it cool for a week and then reread it or have someone else do it. That usually takes care of those irritating little errors. I am older and I think that most of the best work comes from writers your age, or older. Please do some more.