by Uniquetongue
How does one manage to write such shitty stories in succession. Not only are they unbelievable, factually incorrect and completely void of reality .......... they suck. Do everyone a favor and quit.
I actually like the story. A bit more description about how the characters felt about getting a big black cock inside them would help. A description of. Their exhilaration and the strength of their orgasms would add a lot. Don't be discouraged by rude critics!
good premise, but the writing can be much better. If you were either more descriptive or slow down, you wouldn't jump so much.
For example, you jump from one caressing him to the other saying she can deepthroat him better.
Pretty good actually. make it a little longer and this would definitely be a lot more of a fun read rather than being so quick & over.