All Comments on 'The Twist'

Make sure to have an editor help make this an awesome story series. The run-on sentences are a bit confusing and require multiple readings to follow the story line. Good concept that you should continue!

Punctuation.

I'm releasing all 5 chapters as rough drafts, I write these as a hobby if I get good feedback I will do final drafts for all 5 chapters as i will polish each chapter maybe add more Twists I'm not entirely confident in my process as I'm still learning.

Thank you all for ready.

Thank you all for reading enjoy !

You need someone to proof read and edit. Plus you need to slow it down and either write in the first person or as a narrator. Not both. It get confusing. Good plot, bad exaction.